You are going to an English Speaking country for some months. Write a letter to the rental agency. In your letter. 1. the type of house you want 2. facilities you require 3. for how long you need the accomodation

Dear C.A. Rental Staff, My name is Tomás Alcaide and I am contacting you because I am going to study
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in Vancouver.
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I would like to ask for the places that you have for rent.
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, I am looking for an apartment with 1 bedroom and 1 bathroom, it
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has to be in a
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building since my dog will be with me during
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period of time,
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it is extremely important for me that the building counts with a
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loungeroom
, on top of that the residence must be furnished. It is my
pretention
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pretension
to stay for a lapse of eight months, my course
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just 180 days,
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I am planning to go around the city after it.
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, it would be amazing
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the location of my
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has good connectivity with public transportation. I will be waiting for your alternatives, and please do not hesitate if you need more details about
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topic. Faithfully yours, Tomás Alcaide Santamaría.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking your letter into clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph can focus on one idea for better flow.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure you use proper punctuation, especially in longer sentences, to improve clarity.
task response
Add a little more detail about your needs to make your request stronger, like specific locations or budget range.
task response
You have clearly stated the type of accommodation you want, which is great for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter includes a polite greeting and closing, which is very nice.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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