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The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts details about
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the expenditure
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expenditure
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expenditures
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 of
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UAE
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the UAE
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 government in 2000. The
overall
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 fund was AED 315
billion
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. After analysing the pie chart, it can be seen clearly that, the
UAE
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aurthoity
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authority
 spent
highest
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the highest
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ammount
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amount
for
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 social security which was AED 100
billion
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.
In contrast
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, for
transport
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transport,
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 they utilized AED 9
billion
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while
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, AED 13
billion
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 was used for industry agriculture and
emplyment
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employment
. The
UAE
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 government spent
same
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the same
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 amount on debt interest and other
expenditure
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expenditures
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 ( AED 23
billion
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, respectively).
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, the pie chart shows that
,
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 health and personal social services cost AED 53
billion
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 and AED 38
billion
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 used for education. For low and order and housing
herritage
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heritage
 and environment authority send nearly identical amount. The
UAE
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 utilized AED 22
billion
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 for defence.
Overall
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, The
UAE
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 government used
highest
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the highest
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 funds on social security and health and personal social services.
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, they used
least
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 money on transport and law and order.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uae, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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