In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this satetement?

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illustrates
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of
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radio
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and
television
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audiences in
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the UK
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, throughout the
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in 1992 for the duration between October to December. The X-axis of the
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indicates the time and
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the Y-axis
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shows the percentage of
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the UK
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population.
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,
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was surveyed amongst the age group of 4 years and above. To commence with, the
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clearly shows that Britain country has a greater number of
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viewers than
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radio
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users
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during 2/3rd of the days’ time. Approximately, 45% of the public watch the
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in the late evening at 8PM.
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, the
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clearly indicates that post 2AM midnight, the public goes to bed and
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there is a flat line
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be seen from the
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,
that is
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almost negligible
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of around 1 to 2%.
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that, people prefer to start their
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off by listening to
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radio
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. At 8AM in the morning, more than 25% of the Britain people use the
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;
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is a peak usage of
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during the
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. Post 8AM, we could see from the
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that
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significantly get dropped.
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, the audience
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accessing
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post 11AM in the morning and rapidly
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watching
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until 8PM in the evening.
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, in summary,
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is a mode of media channel where we can see a lot of
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.
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, the
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clarifies that people start their
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with
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listening to
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radio
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the radio
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rather than watching
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.
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, the
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audience
are
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almost double
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the
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radio
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number of radio
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users
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly present the main features of the graph at the beginning of the essay. This helps the reader understand what the data is about right away.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to connect your paragraphs better. Use linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to guide the reader through your ideas.
Task Achievement
When you describe trends in the data, make sure to explain why certain trends happen. This will make your response richer and more informative.
Task Achievement
You have provided a good overview of the data showing the differences between television and radio audiences.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear, with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • digitalization
  • online sources
  • convenience
  • cost savings
  • environmental benefits
  • tactile experience
  • distractions
  • collectibility
  • digital divide
  • economic limitations
  • infrastructural limitations
  • digital fatigue
  • prolonged exposure
  • psychological impact
  • educational impact
  • comprehension
  • retention
  • printed media
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