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The given maps represent the changes that have been taken in an office between 2005 and the present day.

The given maps represent the changes that have been taken in an office between 2005 and the present day.
The given maps represent the changes that have been taken in an
office
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 between 2005 and the present day. A brief overview is that the
office
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 took up an open-plan approach with smaller offices and extra
space
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 for facilities.
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, a part of a garden is taken so as to make way for the minor operations
room
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. Regarding the upper half of the building, the green
space
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 has been taken for the construction of a minor operation
room
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 next to which is the unchanged physiotherapy
room
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. Concurrently, three of the old consulting rooms were moved to the eastern south of the
office
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 with the introduction of a fourth one in order to increase efficiency and make up for the reduced
space
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.
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, the main
office
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room
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 is reshaped to be more trapezoidal and
space
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-efficient. Turning to the bottom-half
space
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 of the building, the main entrance connected with the car park which now has up to 30 spaces
instead
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 of 12 is repositioned to the western side. The reception area is renewed to accommodate the children’s play area with seats to the north of which is the moved desk so as to bring in mobility.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, space, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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