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The given diagrams illustrate how the smoked fish have maken through this process

The given diagrams illustrate how the smoked fish have maken through this process
The given diagrams illustrate how the smoked
fish
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 have
maken
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taken
 through
this
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 process.
Overall
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,the ported
fish
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 will later freeze and be thrown into
a
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apply
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freshwater before being cut open and filled in salt water, not until have the
fish
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 been smoked.
After
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this
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stage
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stage,
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 it will be packaged and salted at the
fish
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 shop.
To begin
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 , the caught
fish
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 will be ported and frozen in order to store it through the delivery period.Substantially, it was thrown into the freshwater as a way to keep it in fresh condition before cutting open and later stored in salt water with yellow colouring. Take a look at the remaining steps where it will be smoked before the aforementioned step .
After
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this
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 figure, smoked
fish
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 will be packaged at low temperatures and stored in the cold store.
Finally
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, these will be distributed to the
fish
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 shop where they appear in the market.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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