Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

In a nowadays society the topic of
space
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exploration has sparked many debates. Some assume that these scientific breakthroughs are solely connected to national pride,
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others believe that the goal is
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effort. I am more
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to the second option and in
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I am going to analyse the given topic and give some relevant examples. In the
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decade
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space
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discoveries have developed at an enormous speed. With the development of new technologies, society and especially
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the government
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,
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looking for ways to explore the unknown and push the boundaries. I agree to a
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significant
extent that national pride has always played a considerable role in
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field of knowledge
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in the early days of
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space
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race.
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, coming back Cold War
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USA and USSR poured immense resources to achieve some aims like
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human in
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. Defennitely it was made not primarily for scientific advancement but to demonstrate technological and ideological superiority.
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, nowadays a great abundance of
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stations
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which contribute
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nations and forces to benefit humanity as a whole. Looking to the future, I assume
space
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exploration will become increasingly collaborative. The involvement of private small companies

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it fully.
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Provide a stronger conclusion that summarizes your main points.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic and stated it well in your introduction.
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Your essay shows an understanding of the current state of space exploration.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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