Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

Apparently, some reckon that people explore
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to bring fame and respect to their countries and not to cooperate with other nations to achieve greater progress in scientific research. Personally, I totally agree with
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point of view as I’m used to seeing
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kind of exploration as a rat race between politics and citizens from different regions as well.
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, I believe that there will be significant alterations in the field of
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research which are absolutely inevitable. Speaking of my beliefs in cosmos exploration being a ‘rat race’ between countries, there are some facts on which I base my opinion. In the very beginning of getting close to great advancements in
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study, there was some kind of a contest, specifically I’m pointing out moon landings. It was an
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to be the first in accomplishing that, so both
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and
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had a chance to get there as these nations used to be ahead of the others at that time. Eventually, America landed on the moon first and
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put its flag there for everyone to know that. To be honest, I view
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action as quite a reasonable thing to do, as it's a tremendous accomplishment which was a great help in
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investigations. Though I said that
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exploration is, indeed,
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a country’s pride and longing for recognition and respect from others, I strongly believe that in the nearest future things will be absolutely different from the way they are now. Evidently, progress appears to be impossible without international cooperation and that’s what should be done sooner or later. The only way to get to another scientific breakthrough is to unite
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and power each country has. In conclusion, I want to say that even though nations are not ready to abandon personal interests and work together, it is about to change. Future explorations are going to be incredible.

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