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6 June 2025, The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

6 June 2025, The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the difference between the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012.
Overall
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, the building still had two floors and
surrounded
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 by trees throughout the given period of time.
Although
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 the entertainment
area
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 and the toilets remained unchanged, some new facilities had been constructed by 2012. In 1982, there were three
separated
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 shops on the right side of the shopping
center
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centre
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, with the electronics located between the sports
store
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 and the furniture
store
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.
This
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 place
also
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 had the food
store
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 sited to the north of the entertainment
area
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,
while
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 the coffee shop adjacent to it
in
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 the left corner. In the opposite corner, toilets were built right near the elevator. In 2012, the lake in the northwest of the site was replaced by a furniture retail
area
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 alongside the new parking lot. The food
store
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 was relocated to the
area
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 where the furniture
store
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 used to be.
Similarly
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, the electronics and sports
store
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 were
also
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 moved to the north side of the building,
whereas
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 themed restaurants
had been
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 opened above the food
store
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, taking up three spaces. Other features, including the entertainment
area
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, the elevator, and the toilets remained in the same locations as in 1982.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, store with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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