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Some people believe that students should be given homework every day, while others argue that daily homework is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Some individuals consider pupils ought to get homework on
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 basis, whilst others argue they shouldn’t.
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 understand that
children
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 might revise concepts or topics they have acquired during the day , I think there are more efficient ways to do that without overloading them. On the one
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students
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 can improve their discipline and
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time-management
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 from
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 young age . If
children
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 are
consitently
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consistently
constantly
 doing their homework they can enhance their ability to complete things on
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 and to comprehend the value of
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 . When
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 was a child doing homework
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helped me to become more consistent because
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 had to overcome my laziness in order to complete the
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persistance
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persistence
persistent
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 might become more disciplined and aware of
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 limits .
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 I think it can lead to
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an excessive
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 amount of pressure on
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 without having a worthwhile result. On the second hand some people assert
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that
 most of the
tasks
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students
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 are obliged to do are not effective . They argue that
homeworks
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homework
are
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mainly
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 of
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 that don’t require critical thinking or creativity ,which are more crucial to develop for
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 I can admit
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 view from my experience because as A child
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 experienced
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similiar
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similar
 situation . I had to complete a lot of
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 which weren’t intended to improve my logical reasoning or imagination.
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Additionally
 the amount of work can lead to
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dismotivation
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demotivation
 of
students
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 to study because of tedious
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 that
students
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 must do.
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 believe that
instead
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 of having
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homework
everyday
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, they can revise themes and concepts at school with their teacher .
To conclude
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 there are some benefits of getting hw on
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 as discipline and
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 outweigh them .

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Your introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion.
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You provide a good balance of both views in your discussion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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