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Band 3.5

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

There is no denying the fact that saving
money
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 is important for young generations because it will provide them
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 stability in
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 future.
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 it
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 held to belief that young
people
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 should spend their
money
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 and enjoy without worrying about the future. there is
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 an argument that younger individuals should spend less and save more
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 so they don't get broke and live in the streets.
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 will analyse
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 from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, many
people
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 believe that young
people
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 should learn how to manage
money
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 responsibly.
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, saving
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 from
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 age will make them develop financial discipline.
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 those who begin saving in their teenage years are more likely to avoid debt and
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build
 a stable financial future.
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, some argue that young
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 should spend
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 and enjoy
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their
 teenage years and experience new things
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 of worrying about saving.it is
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 possible to say that, many young Men and Women have limited income, making it difficult to save,
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 students may need to spend on tuition and living expenses, leaving
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little room
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savings
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. In conclusion. There are no easy answers to
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 question on balance
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 tend to believe that encouraging young
people
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 to save more
money
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 is essential, as it prepares them for unexpected events and teaches
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 to value long-term term planning.

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task achievement
Try to make your introduction clearer. State your opinion more directly.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar. There are a few mistakes that could confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have presented both sides of the argument, which is good for this type of essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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