Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that changes have been very positive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that modern lifestyles have raised
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consequences on people's lives. In
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give my opinion. On one hand, in recent days, modern technologies have made our lives easier and enhanced the quality of life.
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as online supermarket shopping which let us avoid
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road traffic and save significant time.
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, individuals can search for any topic as the information is accessible and free
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, a researcher could conduct his paper by using online libraries rather than going to the traditional ones.
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, some
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of the community could face difficulties
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living the new lifestyles for many reasons. One main reason is that nations are living with the challenge
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connected all the time which
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their anxiety.
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, the majority of the population
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more on
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virtual communication rather than visiting their family members which impact negatively in
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people's lives.
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,
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that they have lost the connection with
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nature and living
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concrete rooms and they need to switch off from everything stressful and return back to
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traditional life. In conclusion, despite the community
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different points of view, in my opinion, I consider that new inventions
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saved a significant time and effort and we could not reach
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without the advantages of
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modern
lifestyles.

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task achievement
Make sure to have a clear main idea in each paragraph. Each point should be well explained with examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'first', 'however', 'in addition') to connect your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar to avoid mistakes that can confuse the reader.
task achievement
Good effort in discussing both sides of the argument.
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You have provided relevant examples to support your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Nuclear family
  • Extended family
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare improvements
  • mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Traditional family structures
  • Industrialization
  • Urbanization
  • Consumption patterns
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