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The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the changes that will
accur
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occur
 in a town the
presentage
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present
percentage
 and future , as shown in the two different maps.
Overall
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, the area will become more developed , with new
buliding
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building
buildings
 and
roads
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road
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adds
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.
Moreover
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 with green spaces and
apartment
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apartments
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,
cinema
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cinemas
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,
hotel
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hotels
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,
houses
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and houses
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 . Beginning, with the old
map
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 there was an empty space in the northwest and a park was created in its place on the new
map
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. There was an old garden next to it
in
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on
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 the first
map
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, which was removed
in
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from
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 the new
map
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 and houses were built. In the southwest area ,
tenns
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tennis
 courts have been replaced by
sports
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a sports
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 centre and
parking
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a parking
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 lot was built next to it . There were previously fields in the southeast , but in the 2015
map
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 they were removed and warehouses were built. In 2015
gracers
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gracer
shop
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shops
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 and
block
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blocks
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 of flats
removed
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were removed
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 and made empty
space
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spaces
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. In 1980 it was located in the northeast terraced houses and was replaced in 2015 by a supermarket and parking
a
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apply
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lot . In 2015 , a roundabout was built in the middle of the area .

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban development
  • rural layout
  • open spaces
  • housing areas
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • road networks
  • commercial areas
  • economic growth
  • green spaces
  • urban expansion
  • public amenities
  • community development
  • demolished
  • renovated
  • modernization process
  • transportation infrastructure
  • landscape modification
  • environmental conservation
  • preservation
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