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The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides data regarding the cost of four specific
types
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 of
bread
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 per kilogram, presented in Euros in one country in Europe between 2001 and 2005.
It is clear that
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the
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wholegrain
bread
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 was
most
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the most
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 pricey by 2002, but after that, its price dropped dramatically.
Overall
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, the prices for the three other
types
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 of
bread
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 increased throughout the period. Focusing first on
the
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wholegrain
bread
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, in 2001, it cost 0.8
Euro
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 per kilogram,
whereas
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 by 2002, its price skyrocketed by 1
Euro
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. After that, the figure started to fall sharply to 0.7
Euro
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 by 2004, reaching its initial level by the end of the period. As for the remaining
types
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 of
bread
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, at the start of the period, the price of
the
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all three
types
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 was 0.6
Euro
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,
whereas
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by
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in
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 2003, brown
bread
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 cost 1
Euro
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 more, and during the following years the figure was between 1.4 and 1.6 Euros. Regarding White and Rye
bread
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, by 2005,their prices had increased to 1.3 and 0.7 Euros.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words types, bread, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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