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Writing Samples
Band 4

Should governments invest in public transport?Give your opinion.

Governments should indeed allocate significant resources to the development of public transport systems. Not only do efficient public transport networks reduce traffic congestion, which is a major issue in urban areas, but they
also
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 contribute to lower carbon emissions, thereby mitigating the effects of climate change.
For instance
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, cities
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 as Copenhagen and Singapore, which have invested heavily in metro and bus systems, have witnessed substantial improvements in air quality and
overall
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 urban mobility.
While
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 critics argue that
such
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 investments may divert funds from other essential services, it is worth noting that long-term benefits—both environmental and economic—often outweigh the initial costs.
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, prioritising public transport infrastructure is a strategic move toward creating more sustainable and liveable cities.

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task achievement
Make sure each main point is clearly explained and supported with examples.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas better and make your essay flow smoothly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and a strong introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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