Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: – Explain how much you have missed your friend – Describe how you feel about your friend’s return – Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

Dear Rodrigo, I am writing to you because I have recently heard that you are returning to town.
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, I would like you to settle down in my apartment. First of all, it is extremely
exiting
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to know that you are coming back after five years away from our city, you cannot imagine how many times I have dreamed
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day.
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, I felt so happy when I
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recieved
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received
the good news that I talked to my boss and asked him for a permit to pick up you at the airport the day you arrive. In my
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, it is an amazing idea to live together again like we used to do before your trip.
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, both could save some money by sharing my apartment. On top of that, I know it will help you to feel comfortable from
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day. I hope you and consider my offer, and
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sincerely
want to give you a big hug. Best wishes. Tomás Alcaide

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grammar
Make sure to spell check your letter, especially words like 'exciting' and 'received' that had errors.
coherence
Try to use clearer transitions between your ideas to improve flow.
cohesion
Make sure to clearly express your feelings and reasons in separate sections for better clarity.
positive
You expressed your excitement about your friend's return well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • miss
  • excited
  • friend
  • home
  • together
  • support
  • change
  • improve
  • memories
  • money
  • time
  • joy
  • share
  • strengthen
  • adjust
  • return
  • advantage
  • life
  • complete
  • past
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