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The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the UK from January to July.

The chart shows requests for information at a tourist office in the UK from January to July.
The line graph illustrates the number of
enquiries
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 received by a tourist office in the UK through three different means of communication — in person, by
letter
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/
email
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, and by
telephone
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 — over a six-month period from January to June.
Overall
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,
enquiries
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 made in person and by
telephone
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 saw a significant increase,
whereas
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 those submitted by
letter
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 or
email
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 experienced a steady decline. Notably, in-person
enquiries
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 surpassed the other methods from April onwards, becoming the most common form of contact. In January,
telephone
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 was the most frequently used method, accounting for around 900
enquiries
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, followed by
letter
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/
email
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 at approximately 750. In-person
enquiries
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 were the least common, standing at just over 400. Over the next few months, in-person requests rose sharply, overtaking both other forms in April and peaking at around 1900 by June.
Telephone
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enquiries
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also
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 saw a gradual increase, reaching approximately 1600
at the end
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 of the period.
In contrast
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, the number of
enquiries
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 made by
letter
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 or
email
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 declined steadily, falling below 400 in May and remaining stable in June.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, letter, email, telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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