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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table displays information about the
amount
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number
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 of visitors to Ashdown Museum during
365
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the 365
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 days before and the year after the rebuilding process.
Moreover
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, the pie charts demonstrate data about
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the consequences
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 of surveys asking people who like visit to there at the same periods.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of visitors to Ashdown Museum steadily increased after the refurbishment stage.
According to
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 a
before rebuilding
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 year survey, most part of
the
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it involved dissatisfied,
in contrast
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, the
amount
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 of satisfied people took advantage after the refurbishment process. With a detailed analysis of the charts, the
number
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 of dissatisfied fell down from 40 to 15
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 the satisfied level upped from 30 to 40 at the same period.
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, the amount of very dissatisfied declined to
a
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half of its indicator after refurbishment.
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, both periods had the same
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 result(5). the
number
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 of very satisfied surge increased from 15 to 35 during a period.
As a result
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, the total
number
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 of visitors changed based on before and after the rebuilding stages, they were 74,000 and 92,000,respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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