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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the moneys came from and the charts show how it is distributed.
The figures illustrate data on the police budget for two separate years in a specific area of Britain. The table displays the different sources of money
income
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 in 2017 and 2018,
while
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 the pie chart represents the expenditure proportion.
Overall
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, the highest source of money
income
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 is the national government and the least proportion spent was on technology.
According to
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 the table, nearly 170 million
pounds
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 of
income
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 was from the national government in both years. Other sources (eg grants) are the lowest
income
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 with 38 and 38.5
pounds
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 in 2017 and 2018. Local taxes were 91 million
pounds
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 in 2017, but in 2018, nearly over one hundred million
pounds
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.
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, in the pie chart, the most money was spent on salaries in three quarters in 2017
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 and slightly decreased to 69% in 2018. Building and transport is a significant trend achieved 17% in both years. Technology got a tiny proportion with 8% and
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 increased slightly to 14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • expenditure categories
  • fiscal year
  • operational efficiency
  • resource allocation
  • personnel management
  • National Government
  • Local Taxes
  • Miscellaneous revenues
  • Salaries
  • Technology
  • Buildings and Transport
  • budget distribution
  • financial trends
  • allocation shifts
  • budget increments
  • expenditure patterns
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