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Governments, not private companies. should take the responsibility to conduct scientific researchTo what extent do you agree or disagree? Should governments take the responsibility of conducting scientific research

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Introduction
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 we will
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discuss
if
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whether
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government
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 should take the responsibility to conduct scientific
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either
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 or disagree.
Body paragraph 1
From my point of
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 I agree that government has to be
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responsible
about
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 some kind of scientific
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 about health care or
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something
 related it should be a high
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standard
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Body paragraph 2
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, I do not agree with
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 like the
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gaming
, I think that kind of
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 would be a west of time if we
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confirm
 that the state will read them
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who
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 wrote the statement must wrote it down after
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a lot
 of
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studying
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exploring
 many books and newspapers even networks so what he wrote most likely going to be right but not all the time.
Conclusion
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 but not
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, chaking or conducting
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research
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debands
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, if it
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an
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important or
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related
 to health, the state should
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focus
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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and the main points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to make your points clearer and to guide the reader.
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Provide more specific examples to support your main points. This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Try to have a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion and main ideas.
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You made a clear effort to express your opinion on the issue.
coherence and cohesion
You show understanding of different types of scientific research.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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