the table below gives data on tourists visiting vietnam from eight different countries in 2014

the table below gives data on tourists visiting vietnam from eight different countries in 2014
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the table below gives data on tourists visiting vietnam from eight different countries in 2014
The table displays information about foreign visitors
in
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Vietnam
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from eight
nationsin
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nations
nations in
2014.
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,
although
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more people visited from China than any other nation, they were
also
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among the lowest spenders. Australians spent the most money
overall
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,
while
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tourists from the United Kingdom spent the most money per day. Nearly one and
half
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million
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people visited
Vietnam
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from China in 2014, but they only spent 658$ on average, which was the second lowest figure
overall
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. Nearly one
million
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Koreans visited and just over half a
million
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Japanese spent their holiday in
Vietnam
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. Just over four hundred thousand Americans vacationed in
Vietnam
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and spent $1238, on average,
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they were there. Australians spent much more than any other
counrty
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country
county
with an average spend of $1893. People from the United Kingdom stayed the shortest length of time with only 5.9 days, but
spent
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they spent the second highest amount with $1379 and
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by far the most spent per day. Just over a quarter of a
million
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Russians visited
Vietnam
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and the country with the lowest amount of visitors, Cambodia,
also
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spent the least money with figures of 187,986 and $120
respectivel
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respectively
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words vietnam, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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