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The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the changes in the town of Denham from 1986 to the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the developments which changed in the town of Denham between 1986 and the present
day
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a complete transformation from a largely rural to a mainly modern area. In 1986, the town was much greener with numerous facilities and a few
houses
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However
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, during the time between 1986 to the present
day
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, all the factories have been replaced with
houses
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. With regard to the town, it has changed a lot, and one of the most noticeable in the first year is that the shops were established with numerous
houses
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, and it has not changed for the post office. In the south, the farmland in 1986 was
also
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 replaced by a tremendous number of
houses
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On the other hand
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, the primary school has expanded a lot from 1986 to the present
day
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. There was a large house and garden in 1986; notwithstanding, they have been removed and replaced with a huge retirement home with some trees. In the present
day
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, the roads have become more branched than before.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words day, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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