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The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011.
The provided line graph gives information about the worldwide
food
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price
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index
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, measured in points, and average
oil
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prices
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 ( per barre) from 2000 to 2011. A
detaield
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detailed
 analysis reveals that in the initial given
year
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food
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price
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index
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 was at around 85 points.
This
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 figure moderately fluctuated for
next
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the next
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 seven
years
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 and reached
at
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about 130 in 2007. Afterwards,
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 figure went up sharply till
mid 2008
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 and remained just above 220 points.
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Then
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The
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food
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price
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index
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mitigated
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 in 2009;
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, it
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witnessed an upward trend in the final
year
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 just above 230. Regarding the average
oil
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prices
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, the $30
price
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 was
showed
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shown
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in the first
year
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,
following
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this
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, the same
price
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 line hovered marginally till 2008. Later on,
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,
food
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price
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index
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oil
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prices
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also
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 surged rapidly in 2008 and
then
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 decreased in the next two
years
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, and
was
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 observed
nearly
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to nearly
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 $100 in the
last
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year
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.
Overall
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,
the
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both provided products
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 almost similar
trend
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trends
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 in all given
years
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. Notably,
avarage
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average
oil
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prices
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 were least prevalent in the final three
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, price, index, oil, prices, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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