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The chart below shows the value of one's countrry's exports in various catagories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each catagory of exportsin 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one's countrry's exports in various catagories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each catagory of exportsin 2016 compared with 2015.
The given bar chart and table illustrate the cost and the proportion change in 5 exported
products
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 during the period of 2015 and 2016. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be observed that the cost of all these
products
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 in 2016 was higher than in 2015 with
an
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the
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 exception of
products
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 related to gems and jewellery which showed a decrease in 2016. In the meantime, the proportion of textiles seems to have the biggest change in increasing. Beginning with figures that demonstrated the revenue from selling these
products
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. Commencing with the year 2015 ,
products
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 related to petroleum , engineering, gems, agriculture and textiles had values of 60 , 55 , approximately 45, 30 and 25 billion, respectively,
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 in 2016 these numbers seemed to be higher when they rose to 62, 61, 40, 31 and about 31 billion dollars. Moving on the remaining statistic shows the change in the rate of value from 2015 to 2016.Regarding
products
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 showing the increase in the price of textiles, petroleum, and engineered
products
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 had a noticeable growth, when it went up by 15,24% , 8,5% and 3%.
Products
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 that came from agriculture were likely to be levelled off when it stood at 0,81%. Remarkably, Gems and Jewellery were the only exported
products
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 that showed a decrease in value.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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