Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, many people argue that capital
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should not be used
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while
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others think it must be allowed for the most serious
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, from my point of view I believe that it should be used on the big
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this
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essay will discuss both views and I will share my opinion.
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with, the
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as a result
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of a
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action someone took, and there must be some
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balance
between the action and reaction. First of all, some people think capital
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should not be used,
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because
that would lead to
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dissetion
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dissection
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that
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could take,
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of miss
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missing some of the
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events
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, others
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only in
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a big crime
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crimes
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the
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criminal
must take the
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maximum
punishment
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such
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as killing or kidnaping,
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in my opinion we look at each case one by
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without combairng them, and the jury must take a look
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the encedint
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, so they could reach to a fair desition as a reasult of juctic. To wrap up, people have
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different
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of view about that,
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well
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I shared mine with you which I think capital
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should be used only on
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apply
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serious
crimes
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coherence
Your arguments need to be clearer. Try to separate them better and explain them fully.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion stated in your introduction.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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