“You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Write a letter to a friend about the place. In your letter explain where the place was and how you got there “describe what you saw offer to take your friend there

Dear John, How is everything ? I hope you are doing well. I have been in Ankara and visited Anıtkabir recently. It was
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an exciting tour,
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I wanted to write
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letter to you. Anıtkabir is the tomb of Mustafa Kemal Ataturk, the person who founded the modern republic of Turkey. Actually, I discovered
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building when I was reading a history book about Turkey. If you look at
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building from the outside it looks like a medieval castle because of its high walls and the armed guards in and around it.
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, in the interior, there are lots of weapons, swords, uniforms and books which will interest you. If you are interested, I would like to invite you to come and enjoy visiting
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magnificent architecture with me. I would be extremely happy to see you as always. Please let me know your opinion. Best wishes, James

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task achievement
Make sure to include a bit more detail about how you got to Anıtkabir. This will give the reader a clearer picture of your journey.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas a bit more clearly in paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, which helps the reader understand better.
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Great job on your closing remarks and invitation to your friend! This makes the letter very friendly.
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Your description of Anıtkabir is quite vivid and interesting. It gives a good sense of what to expect there.
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