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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts illustrate what UK graduate and postgraduate students (excluding those in full-time
work
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) chose to do after finishing their studies in 2008.
Overall
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, the majority of both
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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 chose to continue with
further
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 study,
while
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 voluntary
work
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 was the least popular option for both groups. Among
graduates
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, around 29,665 students went on to
further
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 study, which was the highest
number
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.
This
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 was followed by part-time
work
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 (17,735) and unemployment (16,235). Only 3,500
graduates
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 did voluntary
work
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, making it the least common activity.
In contrast
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, for
postgraduates
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,
further
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 study
also
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 had the highest
number
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 at 2,725, slightly more than part-time
work
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 at 2,535. A smaller
number
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 of 1,625 were unemployed, and only 345 did voluntary
work
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. In comparison, the
number
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 of graduate students was significantly higher in all categories than
postgraduates
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.
For instance
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, the
number
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 of
graduates
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 who continued studying was more than ten times the
number
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 of
postgraduates
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, graduates, postgraduates, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate/postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time education
  • voluntary work
  • unemployment
  • travel/gap year
  • percentage/proportion
  • field of study
  • economic factors
  • trends
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • correlate
  • preferences
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