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Many people feel that media coverage has become increasingly biased today. Why is this? What can be done to fix this problem?

There is a global concern about
bias
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media
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coverage
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This
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 essay will discuss the impact of
journalists
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 on enhancing
media
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bias
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 and present practical solutions by involving community voices and
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 strict
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role
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 by the government
prevent
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media
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bias
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 to provide balanced
coverage
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.
journalists
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 are the primary
decision makers
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 for public
media
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coverage
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. Social reports are prepared by certain
journalists
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 who usually share the same ideas and start to present the event from one side only depending on their preference.
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,the lack of individual
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 decision will enhance the chance of sharing
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bias
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 news.
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, if the reporter editors
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 negative attention to specific community groups
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 as doctors, they may choose to cover only the stories that demonstrate doctors as useless to the community.
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 an active
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 to the individuals will mitigate
media
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coverage
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bias
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.
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 engagement in the details of the stories will reduce biased news.
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, introducing
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new policies that enable the citizens to see the whole view of the story through volunteering opportunities in reporting, editing or recording to the resident.
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, the government should introduce new tough policies that prevent
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 in any
events
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. Those are the most effective solutions to
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bias
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. In conclusion,
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newspapers
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bias
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 is widespread over the world
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journalists
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 control, individual participation in news processing and strict
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role
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 that prevent
this
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 attitude will effectively address
bias
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 in
media
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coverage
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. Governments and communities should cooperate to protect
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media
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the media
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task response
Make sure to clearly explain your main points with more details. This will help the reader understand your ideas better.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to show what you will discuss. This will improve the overall flow of your essay.
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You introduced the problem of bias in media clearly in your introduction, which is an important part of the essay.
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Your examples show a good understanding of how bias can occur in media, which supports your argument.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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