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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.
The pie chart illustrates the percentages
about
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of
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 6 different countries of birth of
people
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 living in
Australia
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 and the table represents where individuals
live
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apply
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who
born
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were born
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 in these countries. It is clear from the graph that the proportion of Australian
people
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 who
living
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live
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 in
Australia
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accounts
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is
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 the highest,
whereas
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 China
accounts
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is
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 the
highest
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apply
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country where
people
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was
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were
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 born.
According
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According to
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 the pie chart, China ranked the second highest nationality at about 14
percent
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per cent
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while
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 the UK individuals are in the third place at approximately 7
percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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, we can see that the majority of the population living in
Australia
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 are residents with
proportion
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the proportion
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 of 73
percent
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per cent
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. In terms of the table chart, New Zealand
in addition
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 to
Australia
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are
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is
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 the lowest two countries where
people
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 live at 80% and 83% respectively.
Moreover
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, the percentage of
Chinease
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Chinese
people
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 who live
rural
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in rural
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 areas is 1%,
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 to the ratio of New Zealand
people
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 at about 20%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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