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Some people believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss boths views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that the budget for education is not much.
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 it is a commonly held belief that spending money on modern computers or tablets is crucial , there is an
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 argument that best
teachers
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 mean best students.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On
one
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the one
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 hand, all schools must to provided with good devices
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, it has been shown that children who study with a modern system are more successful than others.
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, smart devices it very important
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 King Saud University in Riyadh used Technology and provided new laptops with a smart system to new students and learners have the ability to use any device in the colleges.
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, the fact that it is crucial to bring good
teachers
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 because education is about how to give the learners information and teach them and help them to be better, it is
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 possible to say that
teachers
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 should have courses and
ministry
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a ministry
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 of education must spend money for Increase their knowledge to can be better and learn the student on a good way
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, many succeed people said when they ask them about how they pass any exam they all agree that because they have a good teacher. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that it is more beneficial to spend money on
teachers
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly introduce both views in your introduction.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences to guide the reader through your points.
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Support your ideas with more specific examples.
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You presented both views in your essay.
coherence
Your conclusion summarized your opinion clearly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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