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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the consumption amount of fast food by teenagers from Australia between
1975to
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1975 and
 2000.
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Hamburgers and pizza faced a dramatic growth during the period.
On the other hand
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,Fish and Chips had a sharp decline.
It is clear that
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 , in 1975 the rate of fish and chips was the highest consumption out of all food up
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 100 times eaten per year .
Whereas
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 ,Pizza and hamburgers were the least picked items in that year .

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