IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have noticed that the street where you live has become dirty and that garbage is not being cleaned regularly. Write a letter to your local council. In your letter: – Explain the problem and how it is affecting your area – Describe your concerns about the impact of the issue – what the council should do to improve the situation.

Dear sir or madam I am writing
this
Linking Words
 letter to express my concern about the increasing dirt and garbage in the area of
barnala
Change the capitalization
Barnala
show examples
 city
adress
Correct your spelling
address
 495 pin
due to
Linking Words
 the
unability
Correct your spelling
inability
 to clean the road on
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 regular basis.Which is causing a load of debris on the road
that is
Linking Words
 causing health issues and creating traffic jams.
This
Linking Words
 thing has
creating
Wrong verb form
created
show examples
 a detrimental effect on health as during the rainy season it will create some malariya insects which are quite common in the
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
show examples
 where there is
lot
Change the article
a lot
show examples
 of garbage .
This
Linking Words
 will create a form of disease which will become hard to handle in the future,
beside
Replace the word
besides
show examples
 the traffic
james
Correct your spelling
jams
 and accidents will become more common if not taken care
.
Change preposition
of.
show examples
 I would be grateful if you look into the matter to clear up the debris which is increasing day by day , by telling your staff members to clear the area for which we are paying. Yours faithfully

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task achievement
Use appropriate language and tone. Avoid informal phrases and ensure your writing is polite.
task achievement
Provide specific details about the garbage issue and suggest clear actions for the council.
task achievement
The letter is polite and expresses concern about the issue clearly.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear greeting and closing, which is good for letter writing standards.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: