Many countries today are expecting high level of migration from rural area to cities what are the causes of this trend, and what effects does it have on the existing city dwellers?

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cities
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there are many
people
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, every day more
people
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arrive, une
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reason
is there are more
emploiment
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employment
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opportunities
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the entry of a lot of
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can generate several problems. The problem is the
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insecurity
, because some
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arrive from
territory
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with problems of security and the
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do not find
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apply
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employment,
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generate
robberies, and crime.
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genetate
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generates
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enviroment
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environment
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adventage
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advantage
is the
people
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move the economy and
increse
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increase
the demand,
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and
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generate that companies
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more
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, and increase the product. we can see, the advantage and
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disadvantages
, in the
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year the
demografic
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demographic
change. Despite that Colombia is
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agriculture
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agricultural
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country,
some times
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sometimes
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we prefer
import
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agricuslture
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agricultural
product
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products
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,
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reason
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the
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wages
in the countryside are low.

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Provide clear examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention specific jobs that people are seeking in cities.
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You identified both advantages and disadvantages of migration, showing a balanced view of the topic.
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You used some relevant ideas about employment and economy.

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