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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different iters in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different iters in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the proportion of money spent on various items, in 2002, across five nations.
Overall
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, the spending categories are split into 3 groups: food/drinks/tobacco, clothing/
footwear
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, and
leisure
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/
education
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. All countries spent the most on food/drinks/tobacco, followed by clothing/
footwear
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, and spent the least on
leisure
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/
education
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. Looking at the food/drinks/tobacco category, Ireland and Turkey spent 28.91% and 32.14% respectively.
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, Italy, Spain and Sweden spent considerably less, with 16.36%, 18.80% and 15.77% of the total spending. Customers in all five nations paid a similar expenditure on clothing/
footwear
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 (in the clothing/
footwear
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 group) in the year 2002, with Italy spending the most in the category at 9.00%. Consumers in Ireland, Spain and Turkey spent on average 6.52% of their expenditures on clothing/
footwear
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,
while
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 Swedish consumers spent the least in
this
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 category, about 5.40%. Customers spent the least on
leisure
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/
education
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, with Turkey dispersing the most at 4.35%
while
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 Spain spent the least at 1.98%. Swedish, Italian and Ireland consumers used on average 2.7% of their total expenses on
leisure
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/
education
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words footwear, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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