Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging

In today's world, the
amount
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of waste
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caused by
packaging
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the packaging
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of goods is undeniable, but
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fault is it? the customers that demand
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it or the
manufacturers
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that provide
these
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overpackagings
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overpackaging
? since these two are each one side of a coin we have to discuss both
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of
views
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. First of all, overpackaging P.R. packages and new products is a problem that
manufacturers
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and
componies
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companies
have to take care of.
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, why does a small lip gloss
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have
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to be
deliverd
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delivered
in too many boxes and plastic bags? Some
componies
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companies
take
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overpackaging as far as sending out big boxes that you have to destroy in order to get to the product itself and the box is not even useful after.
Manufacturers
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and
componies
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companies
should
concider
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consider
a more non-wasteful way to send out their products and
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to use more eco-friendly packaging options. Supermarkets are
also
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responsible. Big or small, supermarkets should
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people to use less
plastics
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and should reduce the
amount
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of plastic that goes towards packaging and
deliverying
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delivery
their
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goods. Offering more economical packaging options, like paper bags or
offering
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apply
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reusable bags
are
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a good starting point.
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however
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it's not only the
manufacturers
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and supermarkets that are responsible. consumers should
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stop buying products that have a
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amount
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of packaging and
chose
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the more eco-friendly ones. in conclusion, the responsibility to reduce the
amount
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of packaging rests on both the
customers
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customer's
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and
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manufacturers
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manufacturers'
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sholders
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shoulders
. we all should work together to solve
this
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problem.

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Your introduction gives a clear idea of the topic and mentions both views.
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You made a good effort to address responsibility of both manufacturers and consumers.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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