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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where reevant.
The two maps
illustrates
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 the difference
of
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in
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 the access
of read
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to reading
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 for a
hosiptal
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hospital
 in
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city
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a city
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 between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the area to
convient
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convenient
 the
vistors
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visitors
 and workers in the
city
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 hospital has
expand
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expanded
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 it can be seen that the traffic system around the building has
updated
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been updated
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 too. To be noticed, the car park which was available to the people who work in the hospital and citizens has divided from one area by 2017 into two areas in 2010. The original area was only for staff in 2010,and the
serving
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parking plot for
public
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the public
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 has been transferred to the
north east
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northeast
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 of the older one. Another change of the road access is that the several bus stops
nearby
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near
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the
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apply
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Hospital Rd in the past
has
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have
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 been transferred into one sum of bus
station
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stations
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 located
in
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on
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 the west of Hospital Rd.
Moreover
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, there had
added
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been
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 three new roundabouts between the junction of
City
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 Road and Hospital Rd, which
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also
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is also
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 situated at the east of the staff car park. The changes
of
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in
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the
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apply
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road access over the period
shown
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show
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 a more
convient
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convenient
 and perfect arrangement of the transport system for the
City
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 hospital.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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