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The chart below shows what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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two charts provide key information about the future destination of the United Kingdom's graduate and postgraduate
students
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 after finishing college in the year 2008.
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, it is clear from the graph that the majority of
students
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 in both categories opted to complete their studies.
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 proportion of them select to enhance their work experience by enrolling in part-time jobs,
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whereas
 a small number
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prefered
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preferred
 to participate in
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voluntary
 work in the two categories.
According to
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 what is shown, almost 30K graduate
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 chose to pursue their studies
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 more than 15k of them began part-time work.
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, less than 4K of them choose to engage in voluntary activities. In terms of unemployment, the number of unemployment among UK graduate and postgraduate
students
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 in 2008 was above 16K and 15K respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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