The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021

The line graph presents the proportional closing prices of special precious metals between 2013 and 2021.

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, throughout these nine

years

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we can see how the value of gold and palladium have been growing in

comparission

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comparison

to platinum which has

sufferes

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suffered

a decrease. There was a fluctuation in palladium value and in 2016

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the lower price close to $500 per oz. After

that

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it went up to over $2000

pero

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per

oz. in 2020. Since that year, has been growing. In

comparission

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comparison

, the other two metals did not have the same increasing level. By 2014, there was a fall

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of close

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to $500 per oz. Platinum

has

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continued his lose value until 2020 when it started to increase.

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, gold has

growed

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grown

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between 2015 and 2020. Since that time it has kept stable.

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