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The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following two pie charts show the results of a survey into the popularity if various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 an 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given two pie charts
depicts
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 a comparative analysis of a survey outcome
that
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of
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 how European adults engaged in five distinct leisure activities in two
defferent
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different
 years, namely 1985 and 1995.
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,
while
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 there was an increasing trend in only talking with friends activities,
other
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 four categories demonstrated downward trends.
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, in both two years, watching TV experienced the highest portion. In 1995, the largest portion was occupied by watching TV, with its value at 32%. The second and third highest figures demonstrated eating out and talking with friends, with their values at 23% and 21%, respectively, followed by talking with family (18%) and others (6%).
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, watching TV percentage had dropped by 2%, falling from 32% to 30%, by 1995. By 1995, time with family, eating out,
other
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 categories experienced a decline trend
by
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 11%, 15%, and 4%, respectively.
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, the percentage of time with
friend
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friends
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 only increased from 21% in 1985 to 26% by 1995, showing a variation from other groups.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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