If you could meet any famous person, living or dead, who would you choose to meet? What would you tell him/her? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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meeting someone who has
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in
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people
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lives in
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way is
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delightiful
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and
amazing. 
Firstly
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, seeing someone who I deeply love and respect means a lot to me,
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, for
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would choose our
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Abudlaziz
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Abdulaziz
who passed away many years ago he was the first person who thought of us as a nation. If
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had the chance to talk to him
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would tell him about the result of his hard
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to build a strong country
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also
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how we don't rely on
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oil only we have many other
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sources
such
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as
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tourisem
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tourism
which is something I know he didn't
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about before he only thought about how he can
provied
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provide
his
citizines
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citizens
with all needs,
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, I will be sad because meeting him and I didn't
achive
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achieve
anything yet I will be more proud of myself if I can tell him about my career and goals.
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, seeing and meeting the royal family is a big dream a
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studies
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have because we see them as role
moedles
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models
and
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guides
.
To sum up
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, meeting someone to talk or
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with them is
fun
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a fun
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thing to do and sitting with a king is a wonderful thing.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraph structure. Each paragraph should have one main idea and supporting details.
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Make sure to check for spelling and punctuation mistakes to improve your score. Examples like 'delightiful' should be 'delightful'.
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Explain your thoughts more in depth. For example, what specific changes have occurred since Abdulaziz's time?
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You express a strong personal connection to Abdulaziz, which makes your response engaging.
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Your passion about your country's development is clear in your writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical figure
  • contributions
  • philanthropist
  • charitable work
  • technological advancements
  • cultural icon
  • art and innovation
  • political leader
  • social justice
  • motivations and struggles
  • influential author
  • storytelling
  • writing process
  • inspiration
  • admiration
  • express gratitude
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