Line graph shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018

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to five European hospitals (Fortsmith, Adlin, Stanton, Bardley, and Oxley) from 2004 to 2018.

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, for most of the period given Bardley had the most

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while

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Stanson had the least. Oxley was the only hospital to see a decline in

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and Fortsmith was unique in that their admission figures remained relatively stable over the period. Admission to all other hospitals increased during the years given.

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to Oxley

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started at just under 250 a week in 2004 but more than halved by the final year (just over 100

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). Fortsmith weekly hospital

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fluctuated at around 200 for the whole period.

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, the number of people admitted to Adlin

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rose dramatically from just over 100 in the first year to 250 by 2018.

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Bardley

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saw a rise from 200 to peak at over 250, the highest for any hospital. In terms of Stanton

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,only approximately 70 people were admitted in 2008 and

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gradually climbed to slightly over 150 in 2008.

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Line graph shows the hospital admissions for five hospitals in a European country from 2004 to 2018

In the interest of road safety, cyclists should be required to pass a test before they are allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

any people believe that the priority of the government should be to ensure growing economy. While others believe that the government should focus its effort on uplifting the less fortunate? discuss both views.

Being a celebrity, such as a famous film star or sports personality, brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some cities public parks and open spaces are being changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own fruit and vegetables. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?