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Write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the ways of learning about another culture. You should explain which way you think is most effective, giving reasons in support of your answer.

Exploring another culture is a great opportunity for many people to broaden their minds to learn something interesting or just to get new emotions .Nowadays , there are a lot of ways of learning different
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. Some of them are reading about the culture or visiting the place in person. Each of them has its own benefits and drawbacks. First of all , taking information from books or websites allows you to be aware of everything connected to the area you are interested in. Concerning
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the second variant ,it gives you not only
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information
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but
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 experience . It allows you to explore a new place by yourself ,to get to know traditions ,customs or unusual facts.
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 to that ,you can even discover something incredible that you won’t find in any resources. Another fact you should take into consideration is accessibility. The vast majority of people in today’s modern society can get any information by using the Internet in a few seconds
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 travelling cannot be affordable for everyone. Without any doubt , different social or financial aspects of life can limit us
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 visiting a new area .
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 everything that was mentioned , I would like to say that the most effective way for me is
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 the place in person . Choosing
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 method you will get unforgettable emotions and live memories. It is crucial to
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 your life in
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, not
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. This will help the reader understand your points better.
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Try to expand your ideas with more examples or explanations. This will make your argument stronger.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences in each paragraph. This will guide the reader through your essay more easily.
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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.
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You have identified two ways of learning about a culture.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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