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Some people think that to lead a successful life, a university degree is important. Others believe that this is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 modern era, some people keep the statement that to ensure a prosperous career and stable life, a title is needed.
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 other people believe that in recent generations, a lot of ways to achieved a
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 in life. In
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 of
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 and give my opinion. On the one hand, the degrees
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 numerous differences
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 fields that need to succeed,
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 as medicine, engineering, law, and so on.
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, to achieve greatness in these domains, a student should have a major in college and study for it to
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 to join these categories in the first place.
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, to become a doctor, studies show that completing a medical degree and
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 completed a licensing exam is essential for
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 medicine.
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, a
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successful
 career is wide open to
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 or having degrees in our modern generation.
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 is because when a person launches a brand or starts a business.
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, these types of fields
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don't
 require expert
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 to improve as much as they need mental abilities and innovative thinking. To illustrate, nowadays studies have shown that most of the successful wealthy people build their careers on enterprises and
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 they created, even though their major in college was completely different from business. In conclusion, I personally believe that to build a life full of achievement, a formal academic setting
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 in a number of ways,
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 as managing projects or establishing a personal brand.
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, there are some
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domains
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 that require an academic qualification to create a fruitful
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professional
 way.

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion at the end. This helps the reader understand your position clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to improve the logical flow between your points.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. Some small mistakes can make your writing less clear, such as 'succes' instead of 'success'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. This makes your points stronger and clearer.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which is important for a balanced discussion.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your views well and reinforces your opinion clearly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • benchmark
  • evolving landscape
  • credential
  • vocational training
  • entrepreneurship
  • digital literacy
  • autodidact
  • innovative approaches
  • skill set
  • networking
  • lifelong learning
  • meritocracy
  • practical experience
  • self-taught
  • upskilling
  • resilience
  • adaptive learning
  • critical thinking
  • soft skills
  • technological advancements
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