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Write a one lesson you learn it from your father, brothers or friends and explen that with the dietels.

My father taught me one of the
important
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most important
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 lessons in my life when I was reckless, after that all my life changed because he taught me how must I respect
they
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apply
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others.
one
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One
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 day I was
gone
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going
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 to
the
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school with my father suddenly I saw
young
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a young
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 boy cross the street and I threw a water bottle at him, My father
stoped
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stopped
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 and made me a
apologize
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apologies
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 to him. After I did he took the boy with him in the car to school and let me walk. When I started walking he asked the boy to throw a water bottle at me, it was a message. If someone did it to me will I accept it or not? I realized from that time that I must respect all others and he told me
don’t
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not to
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 do anything
you
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will not accept it
of
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yourself
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.
Thus
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 I learned if I didn’t like that happen to me why I do that with others
.
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 If we want to live a beautiful life we have to respect and care about each other. Thank you for reading my paragraph.

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task achievement
Your essay has a clear main idea, but try to expand on your points more to give complete responses.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects to the main idea. This will help with the structure of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Include a clear introduction and a conclusion to wrap up your ideas better. This helps the reader understand your message clearly.
task achievement
The experience you shared is meaningful and reflects an important life lesson.
task achievement
Your essay has a clear message about respect and caring for others.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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