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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both and give your opinion

On one hand, it is thought that because of the selfish needs of the people, the impact would remain unchanged as they will continue to abuse plants and animals.In order to sustain
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the economy, individuals will often
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prioritise
 themselves without considering the consequences of the environment and species .
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, Timber woods, particularly found in the
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 forest , are sold for a large price.
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, farmers cut down thousands of trees despite knowing the fact that
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 deforestation could endanger the habitat of
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. Because of people's selfishness and them being inconsiderate, some proponents believe that the negative impact cannot be reversed.
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, I think people's
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 can be changed if the government provides them with different job opportunities, which can equally help them sustain
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the economy without harming
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nature.
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, it is thought that initiatives taken by the government can reverse the impact on plants and animals .

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Make sure to include a clear introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss.
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Use linking words like 'firstly', 'however', 'on the other hand' to connect your ideas more clearly.
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Expand on your opinion with more reasons or examples to make it clearer why you believe change is possible.
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You have made an effort to present both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced view.
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Your use of a specific example (Amazon forest and Orangutans) adds relevance to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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