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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the main issues faced by all
age
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 groups are learning the local
language
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, finding somewhere to live and making friends and the data shown in percentages.
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, in comparison with young
age
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 people the older individuals suffered the most in learning the local
language
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 and
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the middle-agedage
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middle-agedage
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middle-aged
middle-aged age
 group followed closely. The highest number of older people have found difficulties in learning the local
language
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in
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with
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the
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ratio of 54%. But
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the middle-agedage
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middle-agedage
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middle-aged
middle-aged age
 group
as well
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also
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 faced challenges in learning a new
language
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 it is 35%.
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, the young older ratio was lower than other
age
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 groups only 29%.
On the other hand
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, the ages 18-34 and
age
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 34-54 had found difficulties finding suitable accommodation for 40% and 39%.
while
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,
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 old individuals have suffered less as compared to the other two generations only 22%.
Furthermore
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, young older
age
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 (18-34 ) suffered in making new friends
46
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at 46
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% followed by,
middle-agedage
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middle-aged
middle-aged age
 individuals (35-54) at 36%. Only 23% of older people face challenges
to make
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in making
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 new friends.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • challenges
  • language barriers
  • communicate
  • work
  • culture shock
  • customs
  • traditions
  • social norms
  • housing
  • demand
  • prices
  • friends
  • social network
  • expatriates
  • financial issues
  • relocating
  • economy
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