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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012.
The bar chart illustrates the total number of international
students
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 pursuing studies in four English-speaking
countries
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 in 2004 and 2012,
while
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 the table presents the proportion of international
students
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 relative to the total student population in those
countries
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 during the same years.
Overall
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, the USA had the largest population of foreign
students
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 over the given period,
whereas
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 Canada
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 the lowest.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of foreign
students
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 in Australia recorded the greatest share among the four. In the bar chart, the total number of overseas
students
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 increased in four
countries
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. The USA was the most common destination, with around 180,000
students
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 in 2004 and nearly 250,000
students
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 in 2012.
By comparison
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, both the UK and Australia had just over 100,000 scholars in 2004, whilst, by 2012, their numbers rose to just under 200,000, with a slight difference between the two. Meanwhile, Canada remained the least popular destination, with fewer than 70,000 in both years.
According to
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 the table, all
countries
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 experienced an increase in the proportion of overseas
students
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, except for the USA, which remained unchanged at 2%. Australia had the largest share
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and
also
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 showed the greatest increase, rising from 19% to 24%.
This
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 was followed by the UK, which increased from 9% to 13%, and Canada, which rose from 5% to 7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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