It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

From my point of
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both statements hold something of
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. On one side, humankind
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seen people with extraordinary talents from a very young age. Sometimes, it seems like these talents are
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them.
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, there is a
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kid
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at the age of 8 had the ability to speak 10 languages. Another one
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is an
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boy, in New Delhi, who is able to solve very complex mathematic problems.
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,
kids
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with high IQ levels are often invited to join
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university
programmes. In
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regard, even when some of these
kids
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probably study, practice or train themselves, it is evident that they have some kind of difference from other
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. Even if other folks did the same things as the "gifted", perhaps they will not achieve the same results.
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, it can be said that they were born with that
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.
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, once they discover it, they need to
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explore
its potential and
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not take it for granted, but
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better it.
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, I would like to point out that, even when the aforementioned is true, that does not mean that
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can not be taught a
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. Discipline and constancy are key elements for a kid to
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acquire
or develop a
talent
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. Repetition creates habits and habits create routine. Routines are important to become an expert at something. It has been proven by science that children´s human brain is like a sponge, it is able to
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absorb
as much information as possible.
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, letting a kid explore their hobbies
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extremely important. Getting the chance to know
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themselves
combined with discipline is an opportunity to develop their
talent
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from an early age. Under
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context, I believe that some
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are born with
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and some
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others
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have the chance to
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acquire
one. In both
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cases,
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it is important to keep developing that ability or
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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