The best way to solve world’s environment problem is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion

Nowadays,
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pollutions
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increased in all areas.
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started to find serious solutions for
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issue. Some
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argue that
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the best way
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the earth is
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the price of fuel. In my
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, I partially agree with
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with, governments face a serious problem with solving
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issues. Some individuals think
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fuel is the main factor for pollution. So they believe that
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rising the cost of the
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fuel
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will make the countries use less of it in the future. They will start thinking about
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, using solar and wind energy
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of fuel.
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, control the factories because they
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cause dangerous problems like air pollution. The governments should put
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that can reduce some chemical materials in factories.
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, use electronic cars which depend on electricity
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of oil. In my
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,
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fuel
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is not the major reason that
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pollution. There are many various reasons. The countries should work together to put
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for
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issue. All
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should follow all the rules.
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encourage the scientists to discover many investments. The schools must teach their students how they can save their
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.
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, make lectures and outdoor activities to
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more about the environment.
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, the teachers can take their students
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trip
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to the beach and ask them to clean it.
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, the environment is our responsibility. All families should take care of it. The fule is very risky but the behaviors of some
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more dangerous. They should work with governments to protect the earth and make it
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a beautiful
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place for new generations.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and support it well with details.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to help the reader follow your ideas more easily.
task achievement
Make your opinion clearer. You can say if you fully agree or disagree at the beginning.
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Provide specific examples in more detail to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
You have a good structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You show awareness of the importance of the environment and the role of education.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable
  • public transit
  • eco-friendly
  • economic disparity
  • greenhouse gases
  • inflationary pressure
  • environmental degradation
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