General You have decided to go on a holiday abroad for 2 weeks, and you want one of your friends to go with you. Write a letter to your friend asking him to accompany you. In your letter: explain where and when you want to go give details of the travel, dates and costs involved describe some of the things you want to do. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear John,

Dear John, How have you been? I just wanted to reach out to ask you to join me for a two-week overseas escape. Let me explain where we go first. It's Izmir located
south-west
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southwest
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in
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of
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Turkey,
this
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lovely city would be an amazing gateway because of many attractions
in
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apply
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there
such
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as antique theatres,
sea
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the sea
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, and lots of cultural cuisines.
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, next month, between
March
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15 and
March
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29, is the best time to take
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immense trip together because of the huge discount in the period
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time every year. Plus, our travel will take around ten days, including a hotel reservation, which is
5-star
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resort and all three meals involved with snakes. The resort has
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many activities at night- impossible to get bored there! As I mentioned above, the dates will be between
March
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15 to
March
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29. The cost is
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very cheap, It's only 700 dollars for two people and it is all-inclusive, -even flight prices are involved. One
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thing is two important places I especially visit when landing there. The first place is Efes which is the oldest place in the world, and I have seen it in National Geographic.
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, Algebra Town where is the most important place for children who are willing to learn maths. Thanks a lot for thinking about my request. I look forward to seeing you soon. Warmest regards, Ozguc

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to organize your ideas clearly. You can break your letter into smaller parts, focusing on each topic separately.
task achievement
When sharing costs, ensure you explain if it is per person or for two people. This will help avoid confusion.
suitable writing tone
Try to add a more friendly tone to your closing. Perhaps include a personal touch like looking forward to spending time together.
greeting and closing
You have a good structure with a clear opening and closing.
content
Your choice of destination is exciting and well explained.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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