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With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Books
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 have been
immortal
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 part of society from ancient times. With
advancement
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advancements
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 in technology, e-
books
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 are
getting
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gaining
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 popularity over paper
books
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.Some see it as a positive change
while
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 others oppose the notion.The following paragraphs will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of digital
books
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 with logical reasoning.
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 with, looking at
merits
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 of electronic
books
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, they are
eco- friendly
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eco-friendly
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 and
favours
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favour
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 environmental sustainability as no paper is used,
thus
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 saving big chunks of forests from being cut down.
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further
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, they are
more cheap
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 as there is
elimination
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an elimination
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 of
need
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the need
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 for raw
material
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materials
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, so easy to buy and intangible
books
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 are more accessible as they don’t require physical space, so
myriad
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 of
books
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 can be carried in one device.
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 but not least, easy sharing of electronic data is more convenient.
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 and multiple copies can be made available at multiple locations in the world. On
other
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the other
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 hand, digital
books
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also
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 have
few
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a few
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 drawbacks.
Firstly
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, they require
screen
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 to be read , which is not accessible for everyone as electronic devices are very expensive.
Moreover
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, electronic
books
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 increase
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screen time ,which causes eye strain leading to health issues.
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Lastly
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 tangibility of hard copies is missing in these soft copies, which denotes
missing
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a missing
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 emotional connection to the book and
essence
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the essence
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 of
content
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the content
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 is lost. To recapitulate, in
todays
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today
 fast
paced
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fast-paced
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 world
the
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advancements and technologies and spreading like
wild fire
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wildfire
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. Electronic
books
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 are
inseparable
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 part of these advancements so these are outshining
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paper
books
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 due
their
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 sustainability, accessibility and price reasonability , but they cannot replace physical
books
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 entirely because of their Authenticity.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your main points and your opinion. This makes it easier for readers to follow your essay.
coherence
Try to use more linking words like 'firstly', 'moreover', and 'finally' to make your ideas connect better.
task achievement
Give specific examples to support your points. For example, mention how much paper can be saved due to e-books.
coherence
You have a clear structure with an introduction, main points, and conclusion.
task achievement
The topic is relevant and you have identified both advantages and disadvantages of e-books well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Portability
  • Accessibility
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tactile experience
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Digital fatigue
  • Prolonged screen time
  • Technical issues
  • Independent bookstores
  • Piracy issues
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