Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacations. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view

It is commonly argued that the students should be given multiple short holidays or

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one long vacation.

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both have numerous upsides and I align with those who think that giving longer vacations is

benificial

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beneficial

for pupils.

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with, there are several

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benefits

of various short vacations to the students. The first one is that it

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childern's

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children's

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. To explain, most of the children do not like to study for a long time because they get bored and stressed easily. When they get vacation after

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perioud

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period

of time they feel fresh which

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result

enhance

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thier peerformance

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their performance

in study. The other one is that it is easy for parents to handle children at home.

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, when youngsters are on vacation for

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time they do not make any

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unnecessary

demands or mess at home.

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Add a conclusion to summarize your opinion clearly.

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You provided good reasons for your opinion on long vacations.

coherence and cohesion

Your introduction presents the topic clearly.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

139 words

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Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacations. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many cities around the world are facing severe air pollution problems. What do you think are the main causes of this issue? Suggest some possible solutions.

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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.